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課題 Model Essay 7
エッセイ(Written by Saya)
The bar graph shows the statistics of daily fast food consumption for men and women in four age categories in 2015.
According to the graph, men in the youngest age group between 18 and 34, had the highest fast food consumption at 17%. However, the percentage significantly dropped until the eldest age group, 65 (+), reached the lowest at 5%. From the highest point, there was a large drop in size by 6% to age 35-49 age group. While age 35-49 and 50-64 age groups had a similar rate, the drop between age 50-64 and over 65 was significant at 4%.
Similarly, women had a descending order based on their age, however, the percentages were nearly 1% less than their male counterparts. The youngest female age group consumed fast food the most at 16% of daily calories while the eldest group had just a quarter of the youngest people’s consumption.
In conclusion, this essay has analyzed that younger people eat more fast food than older people. This trend is equally shown among both genders, but female consumption was slightly less than males.
(193 words)
Task１で使いやすいフレーズ
the statistics of
- 統計上の
(ex) This graph shows the statistics of population growth.
(このグラフは、人口増加の統計を示している。）
reach the lowest at 〜
- 最も低い値〜に到達する
(ex) The birth rate (fertility rate) of Japan reaches the lowest at 1.2.
(日本の出生率は、1.２と最も低い値に達した。）
drop in size by
- 大きさが減る（落ちる）
(ex) The average food consumption of the US households has dropped in size by 5.5%.
（アメリカ家計の平均的な食料消費量は、5.5%の大きさで減少した。）
While
- 〜をする間
(ex) While the population in Japan starts to decline, the population in India has kept surging rapidly.
（日本の人口が減少を始める中、インドの人口は急激に増加し続けている。）
a descending order
- 降順（大きいデータから順番に並べていくこと）⇨減少すると同じ意味
(ex) The beverage consumption in the UK showed a descending order from 1991.
（1991年からイギリスにおける飲み物の消費量が減少を示した。）
their male counterparts
- 〔相補う二つのうちの〕男性の片割れの方
(ex) The number of female students’ enrollments is three times larger than their male counterparts.
(女子学生の入学生は、男子学生の入学生より３倍である。）
a quarter of
- １/４
(ex) The number of female students are a quarter of their male counterpart.
（女性学生数は男子学生数の1/4である)
is equally shown
- 等しく示されている
The number of the female and male population is equally shown in the figure.
（グラフでは、女性と男性の人口が等しく示されている）
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