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課題 Model Essay 3
エッセイ (Written by Saya)
On the one hand, removing smoking areas from public areas can reduce smoking opportunities. This measure will force smokers to stay away from cigarettes. In Japan, many public establishments have prohibited smoking indoors. Then, as a result, it is reported that many of them succeeded in reducing the number of cigarettes. This exemplifies that depriving smoking opportunities of smokers is the most essential measure to tackle the problem.
On the other hand, others argue that cigarette addiction is serious that several approaches are required to decrease the smoking population. Scientifically, cigarettes contain an addictive substance called nicotine. To stop smoking permanently, smokers have to take adequate medical treatments to make their bodies free from nicotine. In some countries, there are hospitals which are specialized in helping smoking patients. In these hospitals, not only do doctors teach how detrimental cigarettes are to the human body, but they also control patients’ nicotine levels. Addiction cannot just be tackled by smokers’ efforts. They need professionals to assist them.
In conclusion, this essay has discussed both opinions on whether banning public areas into non-smoking is enough to reduce the number of smokers or not. While some believe this measure is beneficial because it will deprive smoking opportunities of smokers, others think smoking is addictive and that professional support is essential. Personally, I agree with the perspective that medical treatment is needed to decrease the number of smokers because addiction is one of the symptoms.
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よく使えるフレーズ
stay away from 〜
- stay away from ~ : 近づけない
(ex) Please stay away from the wasps!
(スズメバチから離れて!)
public establishments
- public establishments: 公共の施設
(ex) That ceremonial hall is a public establishment.
(あの式場は、公共の施設です)
cigarette addiction
- cigarette addiction: タバコ依存
(ex) It is better to stop smoking, otherwise, you might suffer from cigarette addiction.
(タバコはやめた方がいいですよ。そうでないと、タバコの依存症に苦しみますよ。)
addictive substance
- addictive substance : 常駐性薬物
(ex) Drugs contain addictive substances.
(麻薬には常駐性薬物が含まれている。)
detrimental
- detrimental : 有害な
(ex) The over consumption of sugar is detrimental to our health.
(砂糖の過剰摂取は、健康に有害である。)
deprive A of B~
- deprive A of B ~ :AからBを奪う
(ex) My mother deprived me of my free time.
(私の母は、私の自由時間を奪った。)




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